Grey Knights

[WriterAxis]

Seeing as I've named myself WriterAxis here, I should at least see what people think about the 'Writer' part, so here's a bit of a story I've been working on for a while. I'll be posting new chapters here as they're written. Comments and critique is much appreciated!

EDIT: Seems like it won't let me post the entire chapter here, so I've linked the document below. Does anyone know why it won't let me?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KXq03zLEj7shfflHFB-PiEWdxUcwtrIfX70ro3qYzgc/edit?usp=sharing

[lindel]

The story kept my interest and I find myself wanting to know where you'll be taking it.I noticed a few grammatical errors but nothing a quick re-read won't catch